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Entry #11: Shocking Developments

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So I electrocuted myself.

Well, that was embarrassing to admit.

I can’t remember much about the incident itself other than it took place during a routine electrical test. I usually don’t black out during those. Not entirely.

The next thing I know, I’m on my back unsure of where I was, who I was, or if I was even a person. I was just a being suddenly coming out of darkness. It’s like gaining sentience for the first time, being conscious that whatever you were you’re alive now. And in that moment, everything and nothing makes sense. It’s terrifying, confusing, and weirdly exhilarating. Also a little bit nauseating if I were honest. One of the first thing I wanted to do as a sentient being was throw up.

My ceiling was a kaleidoscope of colors. It was first a strange lapis. Then slate. Until finally settling on an uneasy crimson that turned my stomach.

The Woman in the Television looked down at me and shook her head. Her image blinked in and out again, losing focus in time with the changing colors.

As the crimson became too much and her face melted into something akin to a demon—fangs and all—she said something that still echoes in my brain every time I close my eyes.

“It’ll only go down from here, Mr. Harkin.”

I then blacked out again. When I next regained consciousness


I’m going to have to end this entry here. Someone is knocking.
Last Edit: 21 June 2016

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An Insomniac's Journal

I made a horrible pun and I'm sticking with it. I'm so sorry.

This entry is rather short (and was supposed to be a lot shorter if you can believe it). The narrator finds himself at the end of a very shocking experience. 
 
(I'm sorry. I did it again...)

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Shyanne-Kai's avatar

I like those first two lines. They immediately portray that this is going to be a humorous, perhaps a little dark, piece, and draws the reader to want to know more.


'I usually don’t black out during those. Not entirely.' - I do like stories with black-outs, you never knew what will happen to the character! 


'The next thing I know' - Know should be knew as they are talking about what has happened to them.


'One of the first thing I wanted to do as a sentient being was throw up.' I laughed :p


'When I next regained consciousness' - Add a dash at the end to portray he's (she's?!) been interrupted.


I'm enjoying this as well :)